请销毁我的网络电子邮件模板
I'm non-target reaching out to alumni. Is this format too long? Should I mention how I found their email if I got it from LinkedIn? Also should I attach my resume saying it's for "context about me"?
I hope that this email finds you well. My name isxxxand I am a rising sophomore at [university of xxx] majoring in businesseconomics. At school, I am involved in [xxx finance club] and [xxx finance society], both of which have led me to develop an interest in learning about Finance and Banking careers.
我了解您可能有一个忙碌的日程，但是我很想有机会了解您在[XXX公司]工作的经验的更多信息，如果您有时间在接下来的几周内聊天。我期待着您的回音。
最好，
xxx
注释 （17)
following
1. Use their first name, do NOT use Mr./Ms./Mrs.
2.尼克
3.我会专门谈论您为什么对他们的特定领域感兴趣，即C＆R银行业务而不是“金融和银行业务”，因为听起来您不完全确定您的感兴趣，所以他们如果他们认为自己的努力可能会充耳不闻，他们可能不太愿意接听电话。
对于1，如果我要冷运输的MD怎么办？我放弃先生吗？也是如此吗？
Yes - it felt weird for me at first too, but I was told by an MD to call everyone by their first name. No senior banker's feelings will be hurt if you call them by their first name
I'm a rising junior, so take these with a grain of salt, or disregard completely (especially if this isn't for US).
Don't use Mr./Mrs., just say their first name. We're basically the same age as them.
"I hope that this email finds you well" seems odd. I'd cut it entirely, but at least cut 'that'.
Similarly, cut 'both of' from "both of which."
Definitely soften your ask a little bit. I'd leave it at "I understand you have a busy schedule, but I'd love to learn more about your experience working at [xxx firm]. Are you available to hop on the phone to chat sometime in the next few weeks?"
Length is good though. Resumes are hit or miss in my experience, but if you have particularly relevant experiences it might be worth including.
thank you sooo much. Do you suggest I use their first name even if it's an MD?
if you're doing it based off of linkedin look at their face/age. If they are around the same age as your parents then yea. this might be completely wrong but that's how I gauged it lol.
People love talking about themselves, remember that.
Say "My name is XYZ, I am a _____ at ____________, interested in a financial career. I would love to buy you a cup of coffee or lunch in the near future to discuss what you do and why you chose banking/fiance as a career.
Thank you for your time, XYZ"
Be short and to the point.
When I used to send these emails, I always wrote about wanting to talk about their background, but then when I started to receive these emails myself, and asked those same questions by sophomores over the phone, it sounded very awkward and cheesy. Too scripted and not authentic.
应该有一种更好的方法来旋转它。我建议不要问他们的背景，而是专门提及他们的业务范围（例如再保险al estate debt capital markets,...), and mention why you find it interesting or better link it to your background, and go from there....
^这是一个很好的建议 - 将电子邮件量身定制到收件人的工作线上的话题类似。
You should mention how you got their contact info, but it's not a big deal especially if you're speaking to an alum.
As someone who has received hundreds of networking emails over the years, I have a few personal views in addition to what was already said above
您能做的最糟糕的事情是发送一封我们知道您复制+粘贴的锅炉板模板电子邮件，更改了名称并炸毁了街头其他数十家银行家。坦率地说，这很懒惰，银行家几乎没有动力抽出时间来讲话。当它公然明显时，情况甚至更糟 - 即“亲爱的Name" or [Firm name] text is a different font than the body of the email (it happens more often than you think)
If you want to significantly improve your chances of getting a response, take 5-10 minutes per email and try to tailor it to the person you are reaching out to. Don't just say "I would love to have the chance to learn more about your experience working at [xxx firm]". Take it a step further and add some specificity. It's not hard - look up their linkedin and you can come up with a bunch of different hooks
* If they are in an industry or product group, mention you are interested in learning about that group (even if you're not actually...). if they have changed groups or offices, mention you want to hear about their experiences across different offices and groups
* If they have moved around banks, add a line about want to know how their experience at Y bank differed from X bank
* If they've been with the bank for 10+ years , mention how you're interested in learning how the firm has evolved over your 10 year career at xyz
You dont need an essay - just 1 or 2 tailored lines to pique their interest
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